Three new sample essays: Band 9.0 (agree/disagree + discuss both views)

three sample essays

Firstly, sorry to say, no video for this week as I have been too busy with other projects and to tell the truth I was feeling less than inspired. I have been making a video for my partner school in Bratislava English4you to promote our new courses, one of which will be a classroom based IELTS course taught by yours truly, so if you live in Bratislava keep an eye out for that.

Anyway, even though there is no video for this week I still have something for you, I have three sample essays which I have been using with my students this last week. They were written to illustrate the structures and writing process which I talk about in my lessons, so as I spent a bit of time on them, it seemed a shame to waste them, so here they are for your delectation and delight. Or something like that…

I won’t post the structures here as you can find them of several of my previous posts, so just have a look for those, or you can see them on my YouTube channel. So, we have three essays for you, two agree/disagree and one discuss both views. I won’t comment further, just have look and feel free to copy/steal/study them for your own useage. No worries…any questions, you can write me at

Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and taking part in more traditional pastimes than spending all day indoors.

Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It can be argued that instead of spending all day indoors playing computer games, children these days would benefit more from playing outside. I agree with this statement and will argue that children need to develop social skills by playing with other children outdoors, and also that playing outdoors reduces the risk of obesity.

Firstly, it is vital to develop social skills in childhood. That is to say, as adults people need the skills of communication and empathy if they are to find a job and a partner and these skills are more easily learnt as a child. For example, a recent study by Moscow State University showed that 85% of long term singletons were isolated and introverted as children. This research would suggest that interaction with other children, especially in outdoor games, is an essential part of the journey to adulthood.

Also, nowadays a lot of adults suffer from obesity which is often caused by bad childhood habits. Many children who spend a little or no time outdoors in play have a tendency to be overweight and they often carry this poor lifestyle into adulthood. For example, the Russian Ministry of health showed that based on a ten year monitoring of public health in Moscow, 75% of overweight young men spent less than 1 hour of play or exercise outdoors a week.

In conclusion, it can be said that it is good for children to play outdoors as it is beneficial for the reduction of obesity, and for the development of vital social skills to help them communicate better in their adult life. I totally agree with this idea and would recommend that all children have more time for play and socialising with other children.

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Computers and modems have made it possible for office workers to do much of their work from home instead of working in offices every day. Working from home should be encouraged as it is good for workers and employers.

Do you agree or disagree?

Modern technology has made it possible for many people to work from home rather than having to go to the office This essay believes that this practice ought to be encouraged as it is beneficial for both employees and employers, firstly as it saves commuting time, and secondly as it makes workers happier and therefore more productive for their companies.

One of the major disadvantages for many office workers is the daily commute to and from work. Working in a major city often means that many people have to spend several hours a day in travel time, time which they would no doubt prefer to spend at home. For example, a recent survey by The Moscow Times showed that 80% of Muscovites spend an average of three hours commuting every weekday. If workers could work from home online then they would have have more free time for themselves and their families which would undoubtedly make them significantly happier.

As far as the employers are concerned a major benefit of happy workers is that they are likely to be more productive in their work, thus generating greater profits for their companies. In this case, allowing home working for some employees would seem to be a clever move on the part of bosses as they stand to benefit also. For example, research by the Moscow Business Council suggests that over 60% of employers are considering encouraging home working as a tool to boost productivity.

In conclusion, as technology has changed the way many people can work these days, this essay believes that such a move is advantageous to both employers and employees, as it saves time and encourages productivity.

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Some people believe that capital punishment should never be used. Others however, argue that it should be allowed for the most serious crimes.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It has been argued that the sentence of death should not be used in any circumstances, whereas, others would argue that it is right to use it for very serious crimes. This essay believes that capital punishment is necessary and will argue that some crimes are too serious for any other punishment, whereas, the state does not have the right to take a human life.

Firstly, for the most serious crimes a serious deterrent is needed, such as the death sentence. That is to say, for some crimes such as murder, or child sex offences, public outrage demand an ultimate punishment, so the offender will not commit those crimes again. For example, in Hubei province recently a womens baby stealing gang were caught and executed to reassure the public that such crimes would not happen again.

For many people, only god has the right to decide who lives or dies, therefore, the state should not practice capital punishment. In this view, sentencing people to death is morally wrong and imprisonment is a more just and suitable punishment. For example, it is a fact that in the UK there were several cases of innocent men being wrongfully executed and later found to be innocent of the crime. If they had been jailed instead, they would have been alive to be set free.

In conclusion, despite some people thinking capital punishment to be wrong and not the business of man, rather of god, this essay believes that it is justified by public outrage for very serious crimes such as murder and child sex offences.

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